2 Responses

  1. I really like how thorough and detailed your paper is, it goes into a lot of depth about Clyfford Still and his changing artistic styles. The only thing I think you could improve on is the focus of your paragraphs; they are a little on the lengthy side, and each one doesn’t have a clear focus. I think that focusing them more and organizing your paper more clearly would make your paper more powerful and readable.

  2. In your paper, you do a great job of describing the work in depth and with lots of details. I enjoyed how you also provide your own interpretation of the works’ content, but at times can seem too overdone, or not necessary. The information given about Still himself and his career, and about his work and the museum was well balanced and helped your argument. However, I agree with Jill that your paper could use some help with the organization to improve it.

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